Tim L.

Hey Kyousuke! Now, I'm going to be honest here...although there are glimpses of writing talent within this piece, it still needs a lot of work. Cottonrulz was right in their ...

Yeah dude for real, I totally, and completely forgot to add that this is just part of it. Hahaha I must seem like a really bad writer now, yeah this ...

"I think he's breathing, Gene". This was the first thing I heard as I opened my eyes to see the glass chamber door in front of me rise up, clearing ...

yeah by the way I know the format is probably really, really annoying but that's the way it was pasted and I was WAY too lazy to go back and ...

There once lived a man named McSlick Cool J. He was the man. Anyone who looked at him's eyes automatically exploded because he was two awesome. Yes two. Meaning that ...

I'm going to put the entire, nuclear apocalypse idea to bed for a while. I'll continue when I'm done with what I want to take on next...

Ok so, lets review this story. I think you obviously know what I'm going to point out first. The first three chapters, what was up with those? I don't mean ...

That was really great man. It reminded me of sort of like George Orwell's 1984, which is kind of what I've been into lately, all that tyrannical government stuff. So ...

Name: Colonel Bruno Uutenburg Race: Aryan, although he wishes he weren't Race Appearance (similar features for the whole race) : Blonde hair, blue eyes Personality : Bitter, drinks a lot. ...

WaterVypor, Thanks for the review. You gave me some good advice, in fact I wrote this poem quite a long time ago and I didn't even realize the "still stand ...

Silence. For that brief moment in time, the entire country was muffled into a deep, ominous silence. The vast clouds of debris swirled about in the air, tossed around like ...

I don't really have much of a criticism for this. I thought you did an excellent job, and I think anything that was originally wrong with the poem has since ...

I agree with blackpencil. This was not, by any means, a bad poem. However your writing style is too slang-y. The only problem with that is, and this is not ...

I liked the concept of the poem, the whole being a soldier thing. I think if you threw in some more interesting vocabulary to make the whole intensity of being ...

Racism. Can someone please explain the point of all the aggression, Just help me understand the angry and rapid succession, Of the words I hear, all aimed at who? People ...